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Originally posted by GSpreeman
Nice essay. As you progress you might take on a more "sterile" tone so that the academians will be able to read it. For example, instead of the "the boys," take it up a notch and say, "the designers," or developers, etc. Also, be careful with the grammar, "Much of both companies development work," should read, "Much of both company's development work."
Next time if you need a critique before you submit it let me know. I've got my masters from Columbia University and tend to be anal with proofreading.
Don't let the negatives over-power the other stuff. Congrats!
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GSpreeman,
Thanks for the constructive criticism, I'll keep you in mind next time I'm wrapping up an essay and need to polish it up.