Proofreading my lady-friend's final exam

[Gogar]

Sorry, I'm in a strange mood today

This class is called "Politics of Globalization."

She has entitled her paper:

"Saudi Arabia is no more perfect than any other country."

This is two paragraphs from sometwhere in the middle. Enjoy!!!!!!

The hypothesis that emergence of the global economy threatens social policies in this country, gives notion that firms have an increasing ability to go elsewhere due to the existence of free trade. Hence, a central part of analyzing the impact of the emerging global economy in Saudi and the effect of international constraints on social policies relates to the understanding that development of globalization is a process. Saudi Arabia has been affected by globalization through involvement with the Free Trade Agreement (FTA) as well as the North America Free Trade Agreement (NAFTA). Consequently, this enhancement of Saudi Arabia could slowly and surely progress. With this, Saudi Arabia shall circumvent labor policies and labor law, convincing the International Labor Organization (ILO) to support a new agenda. The Saudis have urgent needs to make some very difficult adjustments in both foreign relations and domestic compact governance. Along with labor policies, foreign policies dominating Saudi’s regional security, Arab nationalism and Islam, historically, regime stability and safety of oil exports not to mention the tyranny have been a concern of a close strategic alliance with the U.S.
International diplomacy within a global stable framework, a central element of foreign policy, is security for economic growth and development. All policies established line upon line and precept upon precept will magnify Saudi Arabia as not only an equal in political global economy, but also a country benefitting from globalization while being as asset to the world.
On the other hand, Saudi Arabia is known for the exportation of their primary good, oil and natural resources. A national problem arising is the specialty of Saudi’s oil industry having a limitation. This leads to the infrastructure being heightened by creating new industrial establishments, such as locomotives and weaponry and machinery, etc. Slowing down petroleum and oil production and diversifying the goods and services produced will boost the economy for an increase of GNP, GDP, and profits resulting in oil preservation and a strong infrastructure creating demand. This will bring more funding within Saudi Arabia domestically, adding to education and other business building a balanced budget. Though they may be too rich to change or develop industries, because the rich do not like to work hard, this may open an urge for future equality progressively given to women and non- Wahhabi Muslims. By opening up the domestic affairs, the Saudis may open doors for a renaissance campaign, along with others arousing the Saudi Arabian people to remember their old good days– going back to their true roots of Muslim culture. As a result some social problems could cease while the reconstruction of industrial and rural Saudi Arabia use policy like and/or by WTO and NAFTA, for example, increasing foreign investment, greater emphasis on production, adding historic oil market, for export. Globalization and strong domestication are on both sides of the coin, gradually building solidarity for Saudi Arabia to become the most modernized country in the Middle East.

[stomachmonkey]

You know I hate to say it but all the tense problems make it read like a cut n paste from different sources.

Sounds creatively plagiarized.

[rouxroux]

Originally Posted by Gogar

Sorry, I'm in a strange mood today

This class is called "Politics of Globalization."

She has entitled her paper:

"Saudi Arabia is no more perfect than any other country."

This is two paragraphs from sometwhere in the middle. Enjoy!!!!!!

You might start with "These are" instead of "This is two paragraphs".

check commas.



....nah, skip it and go straight to the monkey sex. Trust me.

[legion]

Is this relationship something you will make official one day or one you want to keep at the "friends with monkey sex" level?

I ask because if it is the first thing, you tactfully address the issues in the document because you care. I did the same thing in college with my wife (then girlfriend). She was mad. I didn't get laid that night. She writes much better now and she still asks my help proofreading.

If it is the second thing, you do nothing to jeopardize hot monkey sex.

[Jims5543]

My ADHD kicked in during the first sentence.

I am voting option 1..... or 4, your choice.

[Gogar]

Originally Posted by rouxroux

You might start with "These are" instead of "This is two paragraphs".

HAHAHAHAHA you done got me thar, Roux.

[lendaddy]

Holy crap man, just knock the bottom outta her and call it a night.

[gassy]

Just go make love, and tell her that the paper is great.
c

[Shaun @ Tru6]

any opportunity for monkey sex should be fully exploited.

[red-beard]

I like monkey sex.

If elected, I guarantee more monkey sex.

[911pcars]

...or if you prefer abstinance:

I got lost with the length of the sentences. Use the period more often. Bite size pieces are easier to digest. Use sentences to describe a single thought and several sentences to support that thought. A paragraph is made up of several interconnecting sentences, not two sentences that appear to be of paragraph length.

To check her thought process and the sequence of topics, ask her to create an outline based on what she wrote. Key words are sufficient for this exercise. Does the word or topic order make sense and/or support the thesis? If not, rearrange or rewrite so it does.

Intro
Supporting text
Summary

Personal sex is sometimes much less complicated, but I hope you both score.

Sherwood

[Shaun @ Tru6]

I think it's important to post pictures of this lady-friend to make the best determination.

[djmcmath]

Hmmm, let me think ... reading an incredibly boring paper on a topic that nobody cares about, or great monkey sex. If you even have to think about that, there's a real problem.

[Moses]

Originally Posted by gassy

Just go make love, and tell her that the paper is great.
c

Make love? You know what the definition of "making love" is?

It's what girls do while you're ****ing 'em.

[gprsh924]

That is the most rambling, incoherent excuse for an answer I have ever encountered. We are all dumber from having read that...may God have mercy on her soul.

[mikester]

This has already been eluded too but I am going to come out and say it.

PICS!

OR!

BAN!

[Rot 911]

Originally Posted by stomachmonkey

You know I hate to say it but all the tense problems make it read like a cut n paste from different sources.

Sounds creatively plagiarized.

I agree, except for the creative part.

[porsche4life]

Originally Posted by Jim Cesiro

My ADHD kicked in during the first sentence.

I am voting option 1..... or 4, your choice.

Glad I'm not the only one.

[craigster59]

Monkey sex first and then have her read the paper to you. You'll be sawing logs in no time flat. That paper could cure anyones insomnia.

[nostatic]

cut and paste is a dangerous thing...

On the other hand, Saudi Arabia is known for the exportation of their primary good, oil and natural resources.

If they export their primary good, does that mean they only have evil left in the country?