[stomachmonkey]

Nice first effort.

Practice shooting in manual focus. That camera needs help in low light AF. Subject is a bit soft.

Get a lavalier lapel mic or a decent shotgun to reduce the "big room" sound.

As far as setup the first thing you should do, (which helps with the big room sound) is sample the room. Capture a minute of nothing / silence. You'll pick up all the ambient noise from the environment. It's always there, no such thing as a pure silence except in space where no on can hear you scream.

You can use that audio sample to create a filter that will process it out of the final product. In a nutshell, a noise canceler. That lets you work with the subjects audio without the ambient introducing odd artifacts.

That camera shoots raw. Get a McBeth chart, couple a few bucks on Amazon. Sample it with the camera before you start shooting.

Let's you build a custom LUT / profile during post because you have known color values to target.

I'd get some exterior shots in and around the hood to edit into the piece when she's talking about the homes etc...

They'll make the context of her dialog more compelling and gives you opportunities to vary how close / far she is without relying on zoom. Basically edit the zoom out, use the VO over additional footage.

If you use headphones, the old over the ear type, while recording you can monitor the audio better.