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Originally posted by thinkfloyd14
Your task in this essay is to identify key aspects of this complexity by responding to following questions in no more than four pages:
1. Introduction. In two to three paragraphs, what are the key issues in this article as it relates to inequality, the American dream and the big gainers in America’s new prosperity? What is used to measure income inequality? 12 POINTS
2. After year 2000, what has happened to the wages of the typical American worker? Indicate with numbers. 6 POINTS
3. What categories of workers (if any) have seen their pay packet increase over the last six years? What category has seen their pay packet decrease (if any) in the same period?
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Okay - here's what I think. You seem to touch on all these. Your sentence structure is fine, your grammar is fine. Double-check your punctuation and spelling, and you're good.
I don't know, though. The writing just lacks punch for me. But if all you're required to do is point, shoot and answer direct questions about the article, it seems you've done the work.
One suggestion:
The article defines this perception as untrue based on the study that if your parents are rich, proportionally you will become rich.
Substitute "your" and "you" for "one's" and "they" as you did two sentences ahead. This will give your answer a less personal and subjective feel, and more of a wide-ranging and inclusive tone that suggests the perception of rich parents/rich kids is more the norm than exception.