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There are a few grammar errors. Describing the US gov't as a "life", using "you" using "may be because". "or own an abundance of property to rent or lease" is also unclear as it is written. I know your intent, but the wording as written is incorrect. Also, there is an overuse of "that".

just some quick pointers--(I hold a B.A. in English Writing)
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