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Originally Posted by porsche4life
Its live!
Sort of soft starting the website. So its up, but I need to finish a few of the pages, and add pictures... LOTS of pictures.
johnson-signs |
Instead of:
"With over 20 years in business in western Oklahoma, and the most, and the largest digital sign installations in the area, we are your digital sign experts!"
Try this:
"We have over 20 years experience serving western Oklahoma. We have the most, and largest, digital sign installations in the area. We are your digital sign experts!"
The grammar and punctuation are better in the second paragraph and the message is clearer.
Scott